Nowadays, there are many air pollution in Taiwan. Air pollution can occur for many reasons. Sometimes com from car. And sometimes from motorcycles and sometimes come from industry. So how to solve the air pollution is important.
Air pollution often has been occurred because some cars or motorcycles would release exhaust gas, these exhaust gas would be scattered in the air with the wind. After period time, people feel the air have thick mist, over time it would become air pollution.
Sometimes it would release exhaust gas by factory. It would release exhaust gas to the air with chimneys of factory, then it causes air pollution. In Taiwan there are many factory and those factory would release some bad air. So I think we should solve the problem. And I hope bad air of factories will be reduced in the future.
Sometimes air pollution would be spread from China to Taiwan. Because when winter coming, cold air of Siberian would spread air pollution from China to Taiwan, then these landscapes looked like foggy. People would feel the air we breathe was not comfortable. But this situation is the natural situation, we have no method to solve it. In fact we can avoid it into our nose to influence our respiratory.
In fact there are many reasons about making air pollution. And it is important to think how to face problems about air pollution. Nowadays air pollution is increasing more and more in the world, we can do is to reduce the air pollution. And we can think how to let the air become clean and comfortable. The way we will have a clean and comfortable air in the world in the future.
Sometimes air pollution would be spread from China to Taiwan. Because when winter coming, cold air of Siberian would spread air pollution from China to Taiwan, then these landscapes looked like foggy. People would feel the air we breathe was not comfortable. But this situation is the natural situation, we have no method to solve it. In fact we can avoid it into our nose to influence our respiratory.
In fact there are many reasons about making air pollution. And it is important to think how to face problems about air pollution. Nowadays air pollution is increasing more and more in the world, we can do is to reduce the air pollution. And we can think how to let the air become clean and comfortable. The way we will have a clean and comfortable air in the world in the future.
"there is lots of air pollution in Taiwan, and it comes from many sources."
回覆刪除You should add some "connecting information" in your first paragraph. Add a few more sentences telling about your experience with air pollution...
Also, please do not use ...etc. In your thesis statement.
Your body paragraphs (about pollution from cars, and scooters, and from factories) are too short. You need at least five sentences in each body paragraph. Tell more about how many cars there are on the roads, and other vehicles, such as construction vehicles, like cranes and diggers, and also how the number of roads and vehicles is changing over time. There is plenty to talk about, so please fill in these paragraphs!
Also, you are over-using "would" only use "would" to be extra polite when making a request, or when talking about past events that did not happen (as in "I would have gotten a better grade if I had written more." When you talk about things that keep happening again and again, such as the wind spreading air pollution from China to Taiwan, do not use "would". Instead, use the present-simple.
Your concluding paragraph is only one single sentence. Each paragraph must be at least five sentences in length!!!